~ The Deep~

Out in the deep of the darkness



While the land is sound asleep

I stare out, soaking in the calmness


When suddenly i hear a faint weep

...A lonely whipperwail calls out to the deep...





Lightning bugs dance about, talking with the night


Stars in the far away distance


Ansewer back with their twinkeling light





A strong breeze awakens the trees


Leaves begin to whisper...


I do believe i heard one say -'can't she let us be?'






Quietness has ceased

As a train rumbles through


It's shrill whistle echos across my mountain


Breaking the silence into






The moon's glow rests on my face


My eyelids feel the need of sleep


I stare one last time off into space...


Then close my eyes to dream of the deep...




CSl '10

The New and the Old

Here is a poem I wrote. I'm putting the original down then the revised addition. Please tell me which one you like the best.

Lost Treasures

Upon the forsaken sods of lands so far away,

Where once man walked but now has been forgotten,

The trees thirst for water, rivers dry up and are no more,

Theres old barns with roofs acaving in,

Abandon towns with gloomy pasts,

but one day man might walk again on this forsaken sod,

once again to reclaim his greatest treasure of them all.

Revised Lost Treasures

Upon the forsaken sods of lands so far away,

Where once man walked but now has been forgotten.

The riverbeds are dry where once the water splashed,

old barns where once the animals slept,

have long since been forgotten,

Abandon towns with gloomy pasts,

but one day man might walk again on this forsaken sod,

Once again to reclaim one of his lost treasures.

-Meaghan